Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir / Madam

I humbly write you in respect to the event that was conducted in your hotel two months ago. My company organised a Christmas get-together which was held in your banquet hall. The event was a success and I enjoyed it.

I love the chandeliers and how spacious the hall was, I commend the lightening and how well it was illuminated. But I would like to suggest areas which needs some improvement and cleaning.

I noticed the windows were covered with dust and need some cleaning, which ought to be done after it was booked. In addition, some of the furnitures were broken and it was not enough, it was uncomfortable when some of the guest had to stand. I was really displeased on that. Furthermore, the sound system was spoilt which made us hired a Dj.

Thank you. I would appreciate if you address this issue promptly

Yours faithfully

Signature

Ajawara Chidimma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the windows were dusty and furniture was broken, providing a bit more context or a specific example of how these issues impacted the event would have strengthened the response. Overall, the task is fully addressed, but the depth of the content could be improved to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for the positive and negative points, and a formal closing. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition,' 'Furthermore,' and 'However' (implied by 'But'). However, the transition between the positive aspects and the suggestions for improvement is a bit abrupt. Additionally, the paragraphing is slightly inconsistent, as the suggestions for improvement are grouped with the positive feedback in the second paragraph. Using clearer paragraph breaks would help the reader follow your argument more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'banquet hall,' 'illuminated,' and 'promptly.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and form. For example, 'furnitures' is an uncountable noun and should be 'furniture.' You also use 'spoilt' and 'hired' in a way that is slightly unnatural; 'malfunctioning' or 'out of order' would be more precise. While your meaning is always clear, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For instance, 'I humbly write you in respect to' is slightly awkward; 'I am writing regarding' is more standard. There are also errors in verb tense and agreement, such as 'which needs' (should be 'need' to agree with 'areas') and 'made us hired' (should be 'made us hire'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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