Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir, I am writing this letter I helped my company organised a party at your hotel so I will prepared all arrangements smoothly attend all guests this event futuremore, all staff behaviour politely with my all colleagues and other cheif guest and the party environment enjoy all peaceful music and all food items fresh , healthy . As u know last time I celebrate my birthday this hotel so thats time I enjoy my special day with my family and friends really delicious food and others arrangment although that's time light problems so I am little bit upset.but I ignore this issue and enjoy my day really my birthday was very memorable on that day me and my family really gald I hope you now light problem again no repeat thanks for concern my problem I hearing from you soon yours faithfully , kamalpreet kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting an area for improvement. However, the development of these ideas is limited by the brevity of the text. The response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement. The tone is somewhat informal and inconsistent, and the narrative flow is hindered by the lack of clear structure and paragraphing. To improve, ensure each bullet point is expanded with more descriptive detail and ensure the letter meets the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The sentences are often run-on or fragmented, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas logically. For example, the transition between the event details and the personal birthday anecdote is abrupt and confusing. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each section of the letter (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and employ linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect sentences more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying on simple descriptors like 'good' or 'nice' (implied). There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'staff behaviour politely' instead of 'staff were polite' and 'cheif guest' (spelling). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise adjectives and nouns related to hospitality, such as 'professionalism', 'attentive service', or 'technical difficulties'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tense consistency (e.g., 'I will prepared'), sentence structure (run-on sentences), and missing articles or prepositions. The lack of punctuation, particularly between distinct thoughts, makes the text difficult to parse. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using correct tenses consistently throughout the narrative.

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