Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I hope this message finds you well.

I am writing to give some suggestions on organize an event at a hotel.

Firstly, I would like to explain you this party will organize on Friday, 9th of January at 7:00 PM. This is particularly important because in your hotel the environment is very well rather than others restaurant.

Secondly, I would like a mention that our group members enjoying a meal at your establishment. I would therefore appreciate it if you could provide us a parking space because I want to ensure everyone will have a parking space for their parking.

Finally, regarding needs some improvements. I would like to tell you about your patio. Ideally, I think it will become more good looking if you do some changes there. I believe this would help you to making your restaurant more attractive.

I hope you will consider my request and take the necessary action . I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours faithfully,

Thomson

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the details about the event are brief, and the suggestion for the patio is vague ('do some changes'). To improve, you should provide more specific information, such as the nature of the event or the specific type of improvements needed for the patio. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening salutation 'Dear John' is inconsistent with the formal sign-off 'Yours faithfully'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' to structure your argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas is weak, such as the transition into the request for parking. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the link between the group enjoying the meal and the need for parking could be more explicitly stated to improve the logical progression of your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'more good looking' and 'give some suggestions'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'explain you this party will organize' instead of 'explain that this party will be organized'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are natural and contextually appropriate. For example, instead of 'more good looking', you could use 'aesthetically pleasing' or 'more inviting'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'on organize an event' (should be 'on organizing'), 'this party will organize' (should be 'will be organized'), and 'provide us a parking space' (should be 'provide us with'). Additionally, there are issues with verb forms and prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice would significantly improve your accuracy.

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