Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I'm writing this letter to express about my recent experience at your hotel. All of my colleagues are happy with your customer service, food but I have some suggestions to share.

Last week on Tuesday we booked your store for lunch. The conference is handled very well by your staff, all of the sound system are perfectly sinked together.

Everyone was amazed by your interior of the store, mainly we like the entrance of the location where one small fountain of water with plants in the background. There is the statue of bullocks in the centre with cute little pots, many of us took pictures it's quite different.

Coming to food, the quantity is good but the quality of the food doesn't seem like fresh at all. The starters were too oily, too add on no salad was provided. Most of the items were served cold. I want to suggest maybe by using shaffing dishes which keeps the dish hot all the time will improve overall service.

Kind Regards,

Srija

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the 'interior of the store,' the description is a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Additionally, the suggestion regarding the 'shaffing dishes' is a good practical idea, but the explanation of the food quality issues could be more clearly linked to the overall event experience to better satisfy the requirements of a formal complaint or feedback letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the purpose of the letter to the positive feedback and finally to the areas for improvement. Paragraphing is used, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical. For example, 'Coming to food' is a slightly informal transition. Some sentences, such as 'Everyone was amazed by your interior of the store, mainly we like the entrance...', lack smooth connection, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in addition' would enhance the overall cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are some inaccuracies in word choice. For example, you use 'store' to refer to a hotel venue, which is incorrect; 'venue' or 'function room' would be more appropriate. The phrase 'perfectly sinked together' is an incorrect collocation; 'synchronized' or 'well-coordinated' would be better. Additionally, 'shaffing dishes' is a misspelling of 'chafing dishes.' While your meaning is clear throughout, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the precision expected at higher band levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'I'm writing this letter to express about my recent experience' is incorrect; it should be 'express my thoughts on' or 'describe my experience.' The sentence 'all of the sound system are perfectly sinked' contains a subject-verb agreement error ('system is'). There are also punctuation and phrasing issues, such as 'too add on' instead of 'to add to that.' While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of the text.

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