Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in connection with the hollywood party organised by me last week on 11th august for my employees.

As mentioned by most of my collegues, food was really delicious and I am really impressed with the variety and quality of all the cuisines. Moreover, staff of the hotel was really friendly and understanding. Everyone has really enjoyed the night and I am really glad that most of the expreince was really good as expected.

Although, everything went really smoothly ,I would really appreciate if the infrastructure of the dj hall is upgraded as lightning was not up to mark to keep thing smoving.

Looking forward to hear from yyou.

Your,s truly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the development of ideas. The details provided about the event are quite brief, and the suggestions for improvement lack depth. To achieve a higher band, you must expand on your points—for example, by describing the specific nature of the 'Hollywood party' or explaining how the lighting issues specifically impacted the event. Because the length requirement was not met, the response is penalized under this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Although' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical due to the brevity of the text. The transition between the positive feedback and the suggestion for improvement is clear, but the overall flow could be improved with more sophisticated linking words and better paragraph development. The punctuation in the closing, 'Your,s truly', is incorrect and detracts from the professional tone required for a formal letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on the word 'really' (e.g., 'really delicious', 'really impressed', 'really friendly', 'really enjoyed', 'really good', 'really smoothly', 'really appreciate'), which makes the writing repetitive and informal. To improve, you should use a wider range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs to convey your experience more effectively. There are also minor errors, such as 'lightning' instead of 'lighting' and 'dj hall' (which should be capitalized as 'DJ hall').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'staff of the hotel was' (should be 'the hotel staff were'), 'Looking forward to hear' (should be 'Looking forward to hearing'), and the incorrect sign-off 'Your,s truly'. Additionally, there are minor spelling and capitalization errors throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing the variety of sentence structures and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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