Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager

Hope this email finds you well

I am writing this email to express my dissatisfaction with the hotel services and staff behaviour which I experienced last week .

To begin with , my company was hosting a big event for its 25th anniversary so it was a big event for us . So , I insisted my manager if we can celebrate event in your hotel . On last Sunday I finally managed to plan this event at your property for which I was very excited as your hotel is ranked number 1 for banquet events.

Therefore, There were few things which I felt were not as upto a hospitality standards . For instance , the decoration was marvellous but the arrangement was not according to the sitting plan discussed before. However, the major issue was your staff , some of the members were not even dressed properly as well as their tone towards our guest was very inappropriate which ruined the success of the event . Besides all this, our members loved the food , the taste was very authentic and delicious.

To conclude , I want you to look into this matter and make the adjustments accordingly for the another coming events .

Yours truly

Ritika

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects (the food and decoration), and suggesting areas for improvement (staff conduct and seating arrangements). However, the tone is inconsistent. You begin by stating you are writing to express 'dissatisfaction' and complain about 'staff behaviour,' which contradicts the prompt's implication of a professional follow-up letter. While you cover the requirements, the overall purpose of the letter feels slightly confused between a formal feedback letter and a complaint letter. To improve, ensure the tone remains professional and constructive throughout, especially when addressing the manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with,' 'For instance,' and 'To conclude' to link ideas. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical or repetitive. For example, the use of 'So' at the start of a sentence is informal and disrupts the flow. Additionally, the paragraphing is a bit fragmented; the opening and closing sentences are isolated. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help elevate the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your points clearly, such as 'marvellous,' 'authentic,' and 'hospitality standards.' However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For instance, 'insisted my manager if we can' is grammatically incorrect and uses 'insisted' inappropriately; 'suggested to my manager' would be better. You also use 'big event' twice in the same sentence, which is repetitive. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating simple adjectives like 'big' or 'good' by using more descriptive alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I insisted my manager if we can' (incorrect verb pattern), 'There were few things which I felt were not as upto a hospitality standards' (missing article and preposition error), and 'for the another coming events' (incorrect determiner usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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