Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to inform you about the feedback on the recent company event arranged in your hotel. You will be delighted to know that the experience was highly appreciated. However, some areas there, could be improved are suggested below.

Our company create an event in your hotel last week. There were approximately 200 attendees in the conference room of your hotel. Your conference room was quite spacious and well ventilated with high quality of audio video equipments. Besides this, the food quality was very exceptional with appetizing presentation and delicious taste. Food also complete the nutritional aspect as well.

However, there are some areas of improvement required in the hotel. For instance, the internet availability was little disrupting during the meeting in the conference room. Nevertheless,the parking area was quite congested. Many people fact difficulty while parking their vehicles in the hotel.

Overall , the experience in the hotel was very satisfactory.

Sincerely

Shagufta

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention the internet was 'disrupting', you could have elaborated on how this specifically impacted the event proceedings to better demonstrate the impact of the issue. The event details are clear, and the structure follows the requirements of a formal letter well. To reach a higher band, ensure that your suggestions for improvement are linked more clearly to the overall success of the event.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Besides this', and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes slightly mechanical or slightly misused, such as the transition 'Nevertheless' before mentioning the congested parking, which does not logically contrast with the previous sentence about internet issues. Paragraphing is present, but the indentation is inconsistent. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used to show logical relationships rather than just acting as sentence starters will improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, using terms like 'spacious', 'well ventilated', and 'nutritional aspect'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'internet availability was little disrupting' (should be 'disrupted' or 'unreliable') and 'Many people fact difficulty' (should be 'faced'). While the vocabulary is sufficient for the task, it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Attempting to use more sophisticated collocations or topic-specific vocabulary related to event management would enhance your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Our company create an event' (should be 'created'), 'Food also complete' (should be 'completed'), and 'audio video equipments' (equipment is an uncountable noun). Additionally, there are punctuation issues, such as the lack of a comma after 'Overall'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of uncountable nouns will help you achieve a higher band.

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