Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

My company had an event at your hotel last week on 20th August, from 6 P.M. to 10 P.M. under my name. I was the one contacted you for booking related inquiries and then we processed further with decision to host my company's event at your hotel. The event's focus was mainly on smart investment for general people and help them understand how market works and what is best for them to invest their money smartly.

After successful hosting of our event my manager truly appreciated arrangement of the banquet hall, along with drinking water facilities and as well as food; which was delicious. Moreover, we also loved the theme of the event which was curated specially for our event's theme.

However, there were some dissatisfaction from the event which I think your hotel should work on; firstly, the restrooms which were not cleaned and there was no proper arrangement for wash hands. One more area of improvement was parking, there were no proper lines for parking which made it difficult for our guests to park their vehicle.

Yours sincerraly,

Ayush

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You provided clear details about the event, expressed appreciation for the banquet hall and food, and identified specific areas for improvement regarding the restrooms and parking. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could briefly explain why the parking issue was problematic for your guests, which would add more depth to your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'However' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor mechanical issues, such as the phrasing 'there were some dissatisfaction' and the slightly awkward transition in the first paragraph. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the task, which helps the reader follow your argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'curated', 'banquet hall', and 'inquiries'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'wash hands' instead of 'handwashing facilities' and 'processed further with decision' which is slightly unnatural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, incorporating more precise collocations would elevate the quality of your writing and move you into a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'I was the one contacted you' (should be 'who contacted you'), 'there were some dissatisfaction' (should be 'there was some dissatisfaction'), and 'restrooms which were not cleaned' (should be 'were not clean'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the letter. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses.

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