Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my gratitude for hosting such a wonderful party for Td Bank at hotel last Friday. The event had beautiful decor, and amazing service provided by the staff throughout the whole evening. All our employees showed much appreciation for the celebration.

The event was our annual end-of-year employee recognition dinner, which took place on 15th July, 2026 in your Hilton Residence. We hosted approximately 150 team members from various departments. The evening featured three-course meal served on tables, followed by an awards presentation and live musical entertainment.

Moreover, I would like to applaud the quality of multi-course meal, seamless AV setup and helpful event coordinator. It helped in maintaining all functions smoothly.

To conclude with, overall experience with doing business with your venture was close to perfect. However, to highlight some segments which can be improved are valet parking and adding some vegetarian options. This would definitely enhance the customer satisfaction.

Yours Faithfully,

Neelu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You provided clear details about the event (the end-of-year dinner), highlighted positive aspects (decor, service, AV setup), and offered constructive suggestions for improvement (valet parking and vegetarian options). The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, ensuring the reader understands the purpose of your correspondence. To reach a higher band, ensure that all minor details, such as the specific name of the hotel, are fully integrated into the narrative flow rather than appearing as a list of facts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your points easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'However' to link your ideas. However, the transition in the final paragraph, 'To conclude with, overall experience...', is slightly awkward. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow. Overall, the structure is clear and effective for a formal letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for a formal business context, such as 'gratitude', 'applaud', 'seamless', and 'customer satisfaction'. There are some minor issues with article usage, such as 'at hotel' (should be 'at the hotel') and 'quality of multi-course meal' (should be 'the multi-course meal'). While these do not impede communication, they prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Using more precise collocations and ensuring consistent control over articles will strengthen your lexical performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and error-free. There are a few grammatical slips, such as 'to highlight some segments which can be improved are valet parking', which is a slightly awkward construction; a better phrasing would be 'segments that could be improved include valet parking'. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors, such as the missing 'the' before 'hotel'. Despite these, your meaning is always clear, and the grammar is generally reliable.

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