Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Manager,

Hope you are doing well; I would like to share my experience with your hotel. We had enjoyed professional meetings at your hotel, although it was a great evening. there are so much crowed in some corners it was create a Noice while meeting.

I would you like to provide you some information about event. it was a meeting with new staff member in addition annual dinner for the whole staff. Also, we were gathering for some discission about new contract.

However, I would like to talk about some beautiful things in your hotel which was I experience. Initially when we were entering, we couldn't find the exact location, but your staff helped us a lot. This behavior was really impressive.

Moreover, everything was going well but I felt some issues like mic which was you gave us for the meeting purpose. on the other hand, I felt there is some places filled with student who had come there for the farewell party they made a lot of sound and their music sound was disturbed our meeting. Therefore, I would like to tell you please focus on these kinds of areas.

Your Faithfully

Ali ,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited by language errors. For instance, the description of the event is fragmented, and the explanation of the issues (the noise and the microphone) is slightly repetitive. To improve, ensure that your ideas are fully explained in complete, clear sentences. While you covered the requirements, the lack of clarity in some sections makes it difficult for the reader to follow the narrative of your experience at the hotel.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow between sentences is often disrupted by grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing. For example, the transition 'However, I would like to talk about some beautiful things' is used to introduce a positive point, which is logically confusing. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'on the other hand' when describing a noise issue. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will significantly enhance the readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede communication. Phrases like 'there are so much crowed' (crowds) and 'it was create a Noice' (it created noise) demonstrate a limited control of vocabulary. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with more precise terminology. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations related to business events and hospitality, and pay closer attention to word forms (e.g., using 'noisy' instead of 'Noice').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently struggle with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'it was create' instead of 'it created' and 'mic which was you gave us' instead of 'the microphone you provided'. Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences and incorrect capitalisation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors requires the reader to work harder to interpret your message. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency.

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