Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Respected Sir/ Ma'am,

Last week our company organised the Christmas event at your hotel and we received great great feedbacks from all our invitees.

I would like to share you with some of the important details about the event. We were amazed by your staff's greetings and the food was undoubtedly delicious. Also one of your staff member named "Andrew Shaw" was truely helpful to my company's CEO who was suffering from an anxiety attack during the event and he helped him get to the hospital at time.

Apart from all the good work from your staff, I would like to give a small suggestion to you is that you have a great terrace view from your hotel so if we plan some new event at your hotel will you be able to give us the access to the terrace for organising the event?

Do let me know if you agree to my suggestion and I will be glad and excited to visit to your hotel on our next organizational event.

Thank you,

Yash Solanki

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting an area for improvement. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the details about the event are somewhat vague; you mention it was a 'Christmas event' but do not specify the nature of the company or the scale of the event. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are more fully developed. For example, you could have elaborated on the specific type of event or the number of guests to provide a clearer picture for the manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Apart from' and 'Also' to link your ideas. However, the progression between sentences could be smoother. Some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing is a bit fragmented. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument or suggestion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'invitees', 'undoubtedly', and 'organizational'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'share you with' (should be 'share with you') and 'at time' (should be 'on time'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over common English collocations. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated descriptors would help elevate your writing to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'great great feedbacks' (feedback is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized) and 'truely' (spelling error). Additionally, the sentence structure in the third paragraph is a bit run-on and could be punctuated more effectively. While your meaning is clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct usage of uncountable nouns to improve your accuracy.

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