Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give you information about event which held in your hotel last week. I am employee of rising star company and we organized successful project party at hotel. I am leading that event. Total 100 persons attend the party.

I would really appreciate your staff service. They organize everything according to need. The decoration was well going with theme of party and it is look stunning. Music system was also working well and they play our playlist which i provide before event.

However, I strongly believe that some of area you should improve like I am not satisfied with quality of food. It was too spicy and I got complain from my some co-workers and also you should use more bright light. Lights were so dim so it create difficulty to get clear vision. So, this are some suggestion from my side which i think you should really consider and work on it.

I hope you think about my comments and implement some suggestion.

Yours faithfully,

Reenkal Desai

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention the food was spicy, providing a specific example of the dish or the nature of the feedback from your colleagues would have strengthened the response. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the structure follows the standard conventions for a formal letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'However' and 'So' to connect ideas. While the progression of information is generally clear, the flow between sentences can feel a bit mechanical at times. Some transitions are slightly abrupt, and the use of referencing could be more sophisticated to improve the overall cohesion. Nevertheless, the paragraphing is appropriate, and the reader can easily follow your argument from start to finish.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'organized', 'stunning', and 'implement'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'well going with' instead of 'complemented' or 'matched', and 'get clear vision' instead of 'see clearly'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to event management and hospitality services.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles ('the event', 'the hotel'), subject-verb agreement errors ('event which held', 'it is look stunning'), and tense inconsistencies. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely cause confusion or impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic articles and ensuring consistent verb tenses, as these are essential for achieving a higher level of grammatical control.

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