Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

My company recently organized an event in your hotel, which was held on 15 August on your lawn. So all my company staff were very happy to attend the party because it was good. Especially, your hotel staff was very polite, and they helped me a lot in arranging everything. Moreover, I met your party organizer, and she carefully listened to my requirements and arrange everthying according to the theme. But on the other hand, I want to tell you something which I suffered when I was trying to book a lawn because every time your call going into busy and furthermore your food was delicious but service slow maybe beacuse of shortage of chefs in the kitchen but overall experience was impressing for me as well as for my company.

Your's Sincerely

Gurleen Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. The content is quite brief, and the lack of length prevents a more detailed exploration of the event or the specific suggestions for improvement. To improve, you should expand on your points—for example, by describing the event's purpose or providing more specific details about the booking difficulties or the service issues. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the brevity limits the overall effectiveness of the communication.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is written as a single paragraph, which is not appropriate for a formal letter structure. A standard letter should have clear paragraphing for the introduction, body points, and conclusion. While there is some attempt at logical progression, the lack of paragraph breaks makes the text feel cluttered. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'But on the other hand', but they are sometimes used in a slightly mechanical or repetitive way. To improve, ensure you use separate paragraphs for each main point to guide the reader through your letter more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You use simple adjectives like 'good', 'polite', and 'delicious'. While these convey the meaning, they do not demonstrate a wide range of vocabulary. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'experience was impressing' (should be 'impressive') and 'every time your call going into busy' (should be 'the line was busy'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise and varied vocabulary to describe your experiences and suggestions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The letter contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples include 'arrange everthying' (should be 'arranged everything'), 'maybe beacuse' (spelling error), and 'Your's Sincerely' (incorrect punctuation). The sentence structures are mostly simple or compound, with limited use of complex sentences. There are also issues with verb tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, such as 'your call going into busy'. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic errors and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures to demonstrate better grammatical control.

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