Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter regarding the event which was held last month at your hotel. Megna Inc. organised this event regarding company annual ceremony. I was the person who choose your hotel for the event.

Hotel staff and facilities were very good specially the sitting area in the lobby. Also, thanks for installing extra televisions in this area on short notice. Moreover, lightning and sound system were clear and crisp due to that people were sitting in the back could hear properly.

My company is planning to organise an another event latter this year. I would like to suggest some improvements such as in food, which quality can be better. Because in last event, food was not fresh and hot enough. Furthermore, Parking area is very conjuncted and was packed last time, so guests faced problem while parking their vehicles. So in our next event we are expecting more people than before.

I would look forward your opinion on this.

Your Faithfully,

Lovepreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention the food quality and parking issues, providing a more specific example of what went wrong or a concrete suggestion for the future would have strengthened the response. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the structure follows the conventions of a formal request/feedback letter effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Also' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally slightly mechanical, and some transitions could be smoother. For example, the jump between the positive feedback and the suggestion for improvement could be bridged more naturally. Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different sections of your letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'facilities', 'short notice', and 'crisp'. There are some instances of slightly unnatural word choices or minor errors, such as 'conjuncted' (likely meaning 'congested' or 'cramped') and 'latter' (should be 'later'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I was the person who choose' (should be 'chose'), 'lightning' (should be 'lighting'), and 'food, which quality can be better' (should be 'the quality of which could be improved'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses.

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