Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I am Rahul Sharma, operations manager at Trancevape Canada Inc.. I am writing this email to express my gratitude regarding excellent service and hospitality experience we had at your Hotel in Toronto. Our company’s Annual grand meeting was held in the conference hall of your hotel, including two nights stay as well as the two meals. Meeting commenced on Monday afternoon on 14th April, at noon. Senior and general managers of the company were present at the conference. They were welcomed by your team with whole heart and respect. Moreover, everyone enjoyed their stay during this period. Although, it was an amazing experience, but I would kindly suggest you to take a look at the cleaning service in the pool area. I personally visited the pool at the end of the day with my colleagues, and the towels were not placed in the designated spot for used ones. I hope this matter will receive your prompt response.

Thank you

Regards

Priyanka Sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the event was an 'Annual grand meeting', more specific details about the event's success or the facilities used would have strengthened the response. The suggestion for improvement regarding the pool area is clear, but the letter could benefit from a more formal closing structure. Overall, the task is fully addressed, though the depth of information is basic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, moving from the purpose of the email to the event details, positive feedback, and finally the suggestion for improvement. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Although', which help the flow of ideas. However, the paragraphing is non-existent; the entire letter is written as a single block of text. To improve, you should separate the introduction, body paragraphs, and the closing into distinct paragraphs. Additionally, the transition between the positive feedback and the suggestion for improvement is slightly abrupt due to the misuse of 'Although' at the start of the sentence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'hospitality experience', 'designated spot', and 'prompt response'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'welcomed by your team with whole heart', which is not a standard English idiom. Additionally, there is a slight inconsistency in the introduction where you identify yourself as 'Rahul Sharma' but sign off as 'Priyanka Sharma'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'including two nights stay as well as the two meals' (which lacks a clear subject) and 'Although, it was an amazing experience, but I would kindly suggest' (using 'Although' and 'but' in the same sentence is redundant). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some awkward phrasings that slightly impede the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on reducing redundant conjunctions and ensuring subject-verb agreement in more complex sentences.

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