Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter for the booking of your hotel to organize an event for my company.

The event was held last week on Monday, 16th August, at 5 p.m. The event was organized for the opening of our company's new branch in another city. It was held in your hotel's third-floor hall.

I liked the management of your hotel, but particularly I liked the music system, food, and service of the staff. The staff's behavior was good with event attendants, and there was no wait for the food.

I want to suggest some areas for improvement like maintenance of facilities, more dinner options, faster Wi-Fi, and extra facilities like play areas. You should also hire more staff so that food services can get faster, and the air conditioner was not working properly. Due to hot weather, attendants were not comfortable.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Dilpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the 'music system' and 'food', these points could be expanded with more descriptive detail to better illustrate the experience. The suggestions for improvement are clear, but they are presented as a list rather than being fully integrated into the narrative flow. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is not just stated but explained with a bit more context or justification.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to the event details, then to feedback, and finally to suggestions. Paragraphing is used, though the structure is quite simple. Cohesive devices are present but somewhat mechanical (e.g., 'I want to suggest', 'Due to'). The transition between the positive feedback and the areas for improvement is functional but could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, and the letter is easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your points clearly. You use some relevant business-related terms like 'booking', 'organized', and 'attendants'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'I liked' and 'there was no' are quite basic. To improve, try to incorporate more varied adjectives and more precise collocations to describe your experience. For example, instead of saying 'staff's behavior was good', you could use 'the staff were exceptionally professional and attentive'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'I am writing this letter for the booking of your hotel' (which is slightly unnatural; 'to provide feedback on a recent booking' would be better) and 'food services can get faster' (should be 'become faster'). Additionally, there is a tense inconsistency in the final paragraph: 'the air conditioner was not working' is correct, but the surrounding context could be more fluid. Punctuation is generally accurate, but watch for minor phrasing issues that slightly affect the natural flow of the sentences.

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