Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

My name is Harmandeep Singh. I am writing regarding review of your hotel as my company organized an event last week.

It was about the celebration of 50 years in business and delivering quality product to society since 1990. There were total 60 guests including staff members and guests. Everyone was in theme dresses, to honor the chief director of company.

All arrangements were wonderful and best part was availability of diverse cuisines. Due to globalization, our organization has employees from different backgrounds and they were impressed with catering service. Furthermore, live music by local artists was immensely soothing and relaxing as every single individual praised it.

Eventually, I would like to highlight some key areas which needs your attention. Bathrooms were stinky and there were lot of stains on toilet seats and I believe this comes under your cleanliness policy. Moreover, air conditioning were not working properly and we reported to your staff members, but no one responded with solution.

I hope this request will receive your immediate attention and action.

Yours faithfully,

Harmandeep Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, though the development of the event details could be slightly more specific to fully engage the reader. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively, maintaining a clear purpose throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a formal closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Eventually' to link your ideas. However, the use of 'Eventually' is slightly unnatural in this context; 'Finally' or 'Lastly' would be more appropriate for listing points. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate distinct topics, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. The progression of ideas is smooth and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'globalization', 'immensely soothing', and 'cleanliness policy'. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'stinky' (which is informal) and 'theme dresses' (which is slightly awkward). While you successfully convey your meaning, incorporating more precise collocations would elevate your score. For instance, instead of 'stinky', 'unhygienic' or 'unpleasant' would be more professional. You avoid repetitive language and maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'there were lot of stains' (missing 'a'), 'air conditioning were' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'no one responded with solution' (missing an article). Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear, and the mistakes do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Your punctuation is generally accurate, and the letter follows the standard conventions of formal correspondence.

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