Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear mr Rahul

I hope you are doing well on the 24 July I organized a event about the 10 years completed in company. I would like to tell that event greatly completed with the facilities your staff provided, so I would like to mention about the facilities about how your waiters attend my all my colleagues and my boss and I also mention the food facilities are really good. You provide different section that I really loved it for the vegetarian and for non-vegetarian people and,I also love the music arrangement you do in that party and apart from this, I also mention about the hotel front desk services provided excellent job because it provide the solutions that the sum of area of improvement about like that your toilet services are not quite good because toilet paper is out of stock that a problem in the party but,company really enjoyed the party and I hope you will improve that area.thanks

bob

company manager

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The description of the event is vague, and the suggestions for improvement are somewhat repetitive and lack professional tone. The letter format is also inconsistent, as it lacks a formal closing and uses an informal salutation. To improve, ensure that each point is expanded with more specific details and maintain a consistent, professional tone throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. It is written as a single, long block of text, which is not appropriate for a formal letter. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'apart from this'), they are often used incorrectly or in a way that makes the sentences feel run-on. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of structure and punctuation, which forces the reader to work harder to understand the intended meaning.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'really good' and 'really loved it' are informal and lack the precision expected in a formal letter. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'event greatly completed' and 'waiters attend my all my colleagues'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student struggles to express ideas with the necessary sophistication for a professional context. Expanding the range of adjectives and using more precise verbs would significantly improve the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (e.g., 'I also mention' instead of 'I would also like to mention'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on, lacking necessary punctuation to separate independent clauses. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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