Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well. Recently, our company has organised an event at your hotel. The event was about how today's technology is taking over the world. It was a great success. All kind of modern gadgets were on display. Many people from different aspects of life were in attendance and our team thoroughly briefed them. The use of robots in the medical field, and how AI can assist us in various fields of life.

Overall, It was a successful event. The high-tea was delicious, and was praised by everyone. The atmosphere was welcoming as the hall was wonderfully themed according to the event. The light quality was excellent. The sound system was working effectively as all the speakers presented their point of view.

On the other hand, there were certain areas which needed to be addressed. The staff could have been more welcoming. They were looking quite insolent. Furthermore, there were multiple issues of car parking. I hope that in future you will try to mitigate these issues.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Arslan Abbas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of the event is a bit fragmented, and the suggestion for improvement regarding the staff could be more specific to help the manager understand the exact nature of the problem. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is expanded with more descriptive detail or context, which would provide a more comprehensive response to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use paragraphing effectively to separate the different topics. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic. While you use transition words like 'Furthermore' and 'On the other hand', the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. Some sentences feel slightly disconnected, such as the fragment 'The use of robots in the medical field...', which lacks a main verb. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that every sentence is grammatically complete would enhance the overall flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'mitigate', 'insolent', and 'attendance' correctly. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'All kind of modern gadgets' (should be 'All kinds') and 'different aspects of life' (which is slightly unnatural in this context). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Incorporating more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing would help elevate your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as the sentence fragment 'The use of robots in the medical field, and how AI can assist us in various fields of life', which lacks a predicate. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors, such as 'the high-tea' (the article is unnecessary here) and 'It was' (capitalization error). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring all sentences are complete will significantly improve your accuracy.

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