Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing a letter to provide a feedback about an event that was held on 11th August, 2026 by my company in your hotel. It was a large tech conference for 5 hours where guests have arrived from different parts of the country. My company and guests appreciated the hospitality and suggested some improvements that could be taken care of in the future.

All the guests and company members were given a warm welcome with soft drinks and some snacks which were delicious. Also, the hotel staff guided the members to their seat politely and were offered assistance when required.

Even though all the arrangements were perfect but the washroom service of a hotel was of poor quality. There were complaints regarding the hand soap which was empty and tissue rolls were missing.

I would appreciate if all these things are taken into consideration for the future as we were expecting to have a next conference soon in your hotel.

Yours Sincerely,

Shrishty Jain

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the details about the event are brief, and the suggestions for improvement could be more elaborated to demonstrate a higher level of task engagement. While the purpose is clear and the requirements are met, the response lacks the depth of detail that would elevate it to a higher band score. Overall, it is a functional and relevant response that addresses the prompt effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, moving from the event details to the positive feedback and finally the areas for improvement. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Even though' and 'Also', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, you could use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother flow between sentences and ideas, which would help the text feel more cohesive and less like a series of individual points.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary used is generally accurate and appropriate for the context of a formal letter. Phrases like 'hospitality', 'tech conference', and 'taken into consideration' are well-chosen. However, the range is somewhat limited and relies on fairly common expressions. There are minor issues with word choice, such as 'provide a feedback' (should be 'provide feedback' or 'give feedback') and 'the washroom service of a hotel' (which sounds slightly unnatural; 'the hotel's washroom facilities' would be better). Expanding your range to include more precise, topic-specific vocabulary would help demonstrate a higher level of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The letter demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips. For example, 'guests have arrived' should be 'guests arrived' (past simple for a finished event), and 'the washroom service... was of poor quality' is slightly awkward. Additionally, 'we were expecting to have a next conference' is better phrased as 'we are planning to hold our next conference'. Punctuation is generally correct, but the sentence structure could be more varied to show greater control over complex forms. The errors present do not impede communication, but they do prevent the writing from reaching a higher band.

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