Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

Hope you are doing well.

I am writing to express my thoughts regrading My company organized 3rd anniversary event in your hotel. I am from the organization team so I have to checked decorations, food and space for guest. We are four people in the team.

I like your hotel because it has huge space with modern amenities such as Furniture, advance technological equipment in hotel rooms and washrooms. In addition. there is huge car parking space and large park so guest can visit outside and enjoy greenery views.

Although, your food has delicious taste with variety of cusince, we are looking for Veg and Non- veg options, which is not available in your hotel. if you can organize, it would be great for my team members. Furthermore, we need more decoration space because other company manager is coming to make deal with us, as a result, we need your main hall space. These are the request from us after we can start proceed for advance.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regard,

Shaikkh Iqra.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The description of the event is slightly confusing due to grammatical issues, and the suggestions for improvement are a bit vague. For instance, the request for 'more decoration space' to accommodate another company manager is not clearly linked to the hotel's service. To improve, ensure that your ideas are fully explained and directly relevant to the hotel manager's role in hosting your event. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it lacks some of the professional polish expected at higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the sentence 'Although, your food has delicious taste...' uses 'Although' incorrectly as a transition at the start of the sentence. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, such as the transition between the event details and the positive feedback. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') more naturally would improve the overall coherence. The paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to separate the distinct points of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'advance technological equipment' instead of 'advanced' and 'greenery views' instead of 'green views' or 'scenic views'. The term 'cusince' is a spelling error for 'cuisine'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited to common, everyday language. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and ensure accurate spelling of key terms related to the hospitality industry.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'I have to checked' (should be 'I had to check'), 'We are four people' (should be 'There were four of us'), and 'if you can organize, it would be great' (conditional structure error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence fragments like 'In addition. there is...'. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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