Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing to share my experience regarding to our company's award function which arranged by your hotel on last week.

In addition, I would encourage some facilities given by your team such as welcome drinks and snacks were very delicious as well as parking arrangements were incredible even though hotel has very limited place. Apart from this, your staff support us a lot in maintaining security which was very helpful for us to make our celebration private from the ordinary people.

However, I want to bring to your attention toward arrangements for decoration which needs a significant improvement since all candles were melt before party completed which was disappointing. Besides this, you should focus on your sitting area due to not having sufficient space to sit which caused considerable inconvenience to our staff.

I would appreciate your great efforts towards our party and look forward to your response.

Kind regards,

Krisha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the event was an 'award function', providing a bit more context or specific details would have strengthened the response. The suggestions for improvement are clear, but the explanation of the 'sitting area' issue could be more precise. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively, ensuring the reader understands the purpose and content of your feedback.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Apart from this', and 'However' to transition between ideas. While these are effective, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. For example, the transition between the welcome drinks and the parking arrangements could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure is easy to follow, which helps the reader navigate your points without confusion. Further practice in using a wider variety of linking phrases would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task. Phrases like 'bring to your attention' and 'considerable inconvenience' are well-chosen and appropriate for a formal letter. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'which arranged by your hotel' (should be 'which was arranged') and 'candles were melt' (should be 'had melted'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over verb forms and word endings. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms for common words would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'regarding to' (should be 'regarding'), 'staff support us' (should be 'staff supported us'), and 'hotel has very limited place' (should be 'the hotel has very limited space'). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, as the letter describes a past event. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while ensuring accuracy will help you reach a higher band.

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