Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to formally discuss about an event that we organized last week at your establishment, and I am so greatful that your management completed this task so well. However, I would like to make some suggestions so that you could improve for the future.

The main concern is sitting arrangement. For instance, our company requested you to make an arrangement for maximum of 200 people. When our event starts, chairs were not enough. Therefore, some people forced to stand at the back which made the situation uncomfortable.

Furthermore, air- conditioning was too warm and it was too hot outside, and wifi system was quite slower and we had encountered lot of issues during our project discussion on the projector.

I would appreciate it if you could replace air condition with new one or could improve the cooling system. Please always arrange some extra space so that people can sit without any issues. Be more cautious with wifi connection because it is most important.

I trust this matter will be resolved promptly, as reference policy.

Thank you for considering my suggestion.

Yours sincerely,

Ramandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these points is somewhat uneven. While the seating and technical issues are clearly stated, the 'positive' aspect is mentioned only briefly as 'completed this task so well' without specific details about what you liked about the hotel, such as the staff service, catering, or location. To reach a higher band, ensure each bullet point is developed with equal depth. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the closing phrase 'as reference policy' is unclear and does not fit the context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Therefore', and 'For instance' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by separating the positive feedback from the complaints more distinctly. The referencing is generally clear, though the final sentence 'as reference policy' is confusing and disrupts the coherence of the closing. Overall, the message is easy to follow, but the use of cohesive devices lacks the flexibility required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'establishment', 'formally', and 'promptly'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'discuss about' (discuss is transitive), 'greatful' (spelling: grateful), and 'wifi system was quite slower' (should be 'slower' or 'quite slow'). You also use 'replace air condition with new one', which is slightly informal. To improve, focus on more precise collocations and ensure spelling is accurate. The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your message clearly, but it does not show the flexibility or sophistication required for a band 7 or higher.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I would appreciate it if you could...'. There are several grammatical errors, including 'When our event starts' (tense inconsistency: should be 'started'), 'chairs were not enough' (should be 'there were not enough chairs'), and 'some people forced to stand' (missing passive auxiliary: 'were forced'). Additionally, 'air- conditioning' is incorrectly hyphenated. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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