Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to provide detailed information regarding our company event at The Royal Hotel and some suggestions for improvement.

To begin with, Seenergy foods Limited organized annual general meeting to discuss revenue generation for year 2025 and profit sharing plans at your Hotel on Saturday 19th April 2026.

Thank you for your support during meeting sessions. The hall is very big with all the amenities such as sitting arrangement, Decoration and fully furnished with modern furniture. Moreover, the dinner was very delicious and mouthwatering, specially the desert and sweet dish. Also, the sound system was very effective and audible for everyone.

Although, the amenities were perfect for meeting, the cleanliness in washroom needs to improve. In addition, many people felt the excessive darkness in the hall, as more lights needed in hall.

Thank you for your support and help. I look forward improvements for next time.

Kind regards,

Raj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the event was an 'annual general meeting', providing a bit more context about the nature of the event or the number of attendees would have strengthened the response. The suggestions for improvement are clear, but could be expanded slightly to show how these issues impacted your experience. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' to link your ideas. While these are effective, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the prompt. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between the positive feedback and the suggestions for improvement feels more natural and less abrupt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for this task. You use some descriptive language such as 'mouthwatering' and 'audible'. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'desert' (which refers to a dry region) instead of 'dessert', and 'sitting arrangement' which is better expressed as 'seating arrangements'. Additionally, some phrasing is slightly repetitive. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for business events and ensure correct spelling of common words. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the' annual general meeting, 'the' washroom) and minor tense or prepositional inconsistencies (e.g., 'I look forward improvements' should be 'I look forward to improvements'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, focus on consistent use of articles and prepositions, and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or conditional sentences to explain your suggestions for improvement.

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