Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam.

My name is Vishal and I work for an insurance company named Desjardin Insurance. Last Saturday, we did a cultural event at your hotel in the Soman hall.

We have employees from different countries working for our company. Everyone wanted to learn about each others background, music, food and culture. Our employer decided to organise a small gathering in the hotel for us. All the employees prepared dance performances, speech or drama to represent their country, so we required different things to make this program successful and your hotel helped us in every way possible.

The hotel staff was really good and accommodating. We requested music system at the last minute and they were able to find one, moreover they helped us to play songs, as no one in our office had any idea how the music system works. The hall area was clean and well organized, however seating was a problem, There were not enough chairs and tables, there was no extra chairs available when requested. Additionally, lightning was also a problem, it was so dark in there because it was a night function.

I would appreciate if you would look into these issues and try to resolve it as soon as possible so that one one will face the same problem in future.

Yours sincerely,

Vishal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You provided details about the event, such as the location and the purpose, mentioned the helpfulness of the staff, and clearly outlined the issues regarding seating and lighting. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure that your suggestions for improvement are slightly more developed; for example, you could suggest specific solutions like 'providing additional folding chairs' or 'installing adjustable lighting' to make your feedback more actionable and professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'moreover' and 'additionally' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, there are some minor issues with punctuation, such as the comma splice in 'seating was a problem, There were not enough chairs', which affects the flow. Improving your use of linking words and ensuring sentences are correctly punctuated would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accommodating', 'organized', and 'represent'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'did a cultural event' (should be 'held' or 'organized') and 'lightning was also a problem' (you meant 'lighting'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated collocations would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'each others background' (missing apostrophe), 'speech or drama' (should be plural 'speeches or dramas'), and 'no one in our office had any idea how the music system works' (tense inconsistency: 'worked'). Furthermore, there are punctuation errors, specifically the use of a period instead of a comma after 'Dear Sir/Madam' and comma splices in the third paragraph. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will improve your accuracy.

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