Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir ,

I am writing this letter to reveal about a program which organise a event by my company in your hotel .

Last Friday a function held in you hotel . That event held by my company . They loved everything . For example , when we entered the hotel the smell of the flowers were so good . apart from this , services were good . Moreover the best thing was food . Your provided best food for us with unique way . Everyone loves this thing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 90 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed, and the ideas are significantly under-developed. While you have touched upon the three required bullet points—providing details about the event, mentioning what you liked, and suggesting improvements—the lack of length means these points are not extended or supported sufficiently. To improve, you must expand on each section with more specific details, such as the nature of the event, specific examples of the hotel's service, and constructive suggestions for improvement, ensuring you meet the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, which is essential for a formal letter. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas, the transitions between sentences are mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'apart from this', 'moreover'). The lack of paragraphing makes the text appear as a single block, which hinders the logical flow. To improve, you should organize your letter into distinct paragraphs: one for the event details, one for the positive aspects, one for the suggestions, and a concluding sentence. Using a wider range of cohesive devices, such as 'consequently' or 'in addition to this', would also improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'good', 'loved', and 'thing', which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'reveal about a program' and 'unique way'. To improve, try to use more precise and descriptive language. Instead of 'good', use adjectives like 'impeccable' or 'exceptional'. Instead of 'loved', use 'impressed by'. Expanding your vocabulary will help you express your ideas more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'a program which organise a event' (subject-verb agreement and article usage), 'a function held in you hotel' (missing verb 'was' and incorrect pronoun 'you'), and 'the smell of the flowers were so good' (subject-verb agreement). The sentence structures are simple and lack variety. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Once these are consistent, work on incorporating complex sentence structures using relative clauses or conditional sentences to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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