Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this to express my gratitude for allowing us to organise a farewell party for one of our colleague and to inform you a few areas which we would like you to look into them and take necessary actions.

First of all, I would like to appreciate your help and cooperation in organising this farewell party. One of our employees is retiring this week, and it is morally and professionally obligatory for us to give him a memorable one last experience, because he has severed this company for more than twenty-year.

Moreover, it would especially like to mention the services you have provided are exceptionally extraordinary. Similarly, the meal was upto the taste, and we have expected. In addition to that the lightening was comfortablely brilliant, and multimedia system was appropriately installed.

However, there are a few areas, I would appreciate it if you could look into them and take appropriate actions, such as the lift was malfunctioning. Furthermore, the halls are not marked which can cause inconvenience to outsiders, but we have already been there before it has not caused any issue for us.

I am looking forward to a positive response from your side, and would appreciate an appropriate action.

Yours faithfully,

Ayaz

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. The purpose of the letter is clear from the outset. However, some ideas could be developed further; for instance, the description of the event is slightly brief, and the suggestions for improvement could be more specific regarding the impact of the malfunctioning lift. Despite these minor points, the response covers all requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the task. Cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', 'In addition to that', and 'However' are used to guide the reader through the text. While the flow is generally good, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing in the final paragraph ('we have already been there before it has not caused any issue') is a bit clunky, which slightly affects the overall smoothness of the progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. There are some good attempts at using more sophisticated language, such as 'morally and professionally obligatory' and 'exceptionally extraordinary'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'severed this company' (should be 'served'), 'upto the taste' (should be 'up to our expectations'), and 'lightening' (should be 'lighting'). These errors do not impede communication, but they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'one of our colleague' (should be 'colleagues'), 'inform you a few areas' (should be 'inform you of a few areas'), and 'comfortablely brilliant' (adverbial error). The sentence 'the halls are not marked which can cause inconvenience' lacks a comma before 'which'. While the meaning is always clear and the errors do not cause significant difficulty for the reader, the frequency of these slips prevents the writing from reaching a higher band.

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