Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am Lovedeep Sandhu who is writing an email to you regarding helping to organize an event at your hotel. There was an event and I helped to decor everywhere in the hotel hall to celebrate event smoothly. I have full of knowledge about cooking so, I also helped to decide menu of food for the event. When tis event was going on and there was great end of this event I felt so proud on me because I completed my all responsibilities responsibly. I hope you were also liked everything in the event like decoration and food which I managed. Finally, it was a great experience for me like I learned so many things from it like problem solving skills and management skills. Furthermore, now I am feelings like I am able to organize more events in future. And thank you for your understanding and appreciations.

Your regards,

Lovedeep Sandhu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. The details about the event are vague, and the suggestions for improvement are entirely missing from the text. The tone is somewhat informal and repetitive, which detracts from the professional nature of the task. To improve, you should explicitly state what could be improved at the hotel (e.g., parking, lighting, or staff communication) and ensure the letter follows a standard formal structure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is written as a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. IELTS letters should be structured into clear paragraphs for each point. While there is a basic attempt to link ideas using words like 'Finally' and 'Furthermore', the flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The lack of paragraphing significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response. Using clear topic sentences for each paragraph would greatly improve the logical progression of your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'I helped to decor' and 'I felt so proud on me' are unnatural and contain errors in word choice and collocation. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for a formal business letter. You rely heavily on simple, high-frequency words. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to event management, such as 'coordination,' 'logistics,' 'catering,' or 'recommendations,' and ensure your word forms are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('I hope you were also liked'), word order, and sentence construction. The use of articles and prepositions is often incorrect, such as 'I am Lovedeep Sandhu who is writing'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors causes some strain for the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex forms. Proofreading for common errors like 'tis' (this) and 'decor' (decoration) is essential.

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