Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear madam,

According from my standpoint the event was actually gleaming and extremely adorable I meet alot of directors or ceo i pleasures to meet them . The hotel was actually nice decorated by unique Crystals that part i actually like also like the party the event was actually gone superb. The hotel surge part was a natural light organise with a little crazy it's look insane i hold an appreciate for decoration ideas recommendation use different various light to look cool or aesthetic. Initiate we also need help somebody who's actually has creative mind the light change whole event look it's also make peacefully or elegant. The manager has managed all of these scrub i hope fully are you enjoying that event I also wanna meet them properly work it's make always better just like we make it make it advance or nicely thank for listening me hopefully you like this thanks you pleasure to meet you.

greeming and extremely adorable finest level of

directors or ceo i pleasures to meet them . The hotel

was actually nice decorated by unique Crystals that

part i actually like also like the party the event was

actually gone superb. The hotel surge part was a

natural light organise with a little crazy it's look insane i

hold an appreciate for decoration ideas

recommendation use different various light to look cool

or aesthetic. Initiate we also need help somebody

who's actually has creative mind the light change whole

event look it's also make peacefully or elegant. The

manager has managed all of these scrub i hope fully

are you enjoying that event i also wanna meet them

properly work it's make always better just like we make

it make it advance or nicely thank for listening me

hopefully you like this thanks you pleasure to meet you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. However, the development of these ideas is hindered by significant clarity issues. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the content is often repetitive and lacks the formal tone required for a business letter. The ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the specific details of the event or the nature of the suggestions. To improve, focus on structuring the response into clear paragraphs and ensuring each point is explained with coherent, logical sentences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks a clear structure or paragraphing, which is essential for a formal letter. Ideas are strung together with minimal logical progression, and the use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent. The text relies on run-on sentences and repetitive phrasing, which makes the flow disjointed. There is no clear opening or closing structure appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To improve, use transition words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to link ideas and organize the content into distinct paragraphs for each task requirement.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and often misused, which frequently impedes communication. Words like 'gleaming', 'adorable', 'insane', and 'scrub' are used inappropriately in a professional context. There is a heavy reliance on basic, repetitive language, and the attempt to use more complex terms results in unnatural collocations. The lack of control over word choice makes the tone inconsistent and unprofessional. To improve, focus on learning formal business vocabulary and practicing the correct usage of adjectives and nouns in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to understand. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'somebody who's actually has'), sentence structure (run-on sentences), and punctuation. The lack of proper sentence boundaries and the misuse of verb tenses significantly distort the meaning. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing correct punctuation.

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