Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir

I am writing a letter with over recent organize event in your hotel related with my working company. Event is related with the party success of over completion. I searched your hotel with the help of over company members. I really like it how you organize the things and it is very spacious everyone enjoy their comfortably without noises and you also organize food so well I really appreciate your efforts you do according to us but just little bit things I think u need to improve some little things with your furniture some things are little bit old that's why some people feel awkward on that moreover I also feel little bit issue related with washrooms its messy and to far away from the event so with that over guests get so confused and asked from staff again again otherwise I liked every things I just write letter because we also want to organize over events in your hotel thank you so much for your time .I want to enjoy on this place again .

Thanku

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the task: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The description of the event is vague, and the suggestions for improvement, while relevant, are expressed in a repetitive and informal manner. The tone is inconsistent for a formal letter to a hotel manager, lacking the appropriate professional register required for this task. To improve, you should expand on your ideas with more specific details and adopt a more formal, polite tone throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. The entire response is written as a single block of text, which is not appropriate for a formal letter. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often strung together with 'and' or 'but', and the use of transition words is minimal or misused. For example, the transition 'otherwise' is used awkwardly to connect disparate thoughts. To improve, you must use clear paragraph breaks for each section of the letter and incorporate a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple words like 'things', 'little bit', and 'good'. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'party success of over completion' and 'asked from staff again again'. The spelling of 'Thanku' is informal and inappropriate for a business letter. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to event management and hospitality, and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for a formal context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. There are consistent errors with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, such as the lack of capitalization for 'Dear sir' and the misuse of periods. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically flawed, such as 'I really like it how you organize the things'. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and proper punctuation will significantly improve your score.

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