Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

DEAR SIR

I AM VERY THANKFUL YOU TO ORGANISE A PARTY AT A VERY BEAUTIFUL HOTEL .THIS HOTEL PROVIDE A VERY GOOD FOOD AND VLEAR ROOMS WITH EVERYTHING . WE DO NOT FACE ANY KIND OF PROBLEM THERE BY USING ANYTHING. ONE OF BEST THIS IS THAT IT HAS A NETWORKING SESSION.

WE ARE VERY IMPRESSED BY THE FRIENDLY STAFF. THEY HELP US IN OUR EVERY TASK. MOST IMPORTANTLY THAT THE FOOD WAS VERY DELICIOUS WE ENJOY THE HOMEMADE FOOD THERE WHICH IS VERY HEALTHY .

HOWEVER THERE WAS A LITTLE THINGS WHICH THEY HAVE TO IMPROVE THAT DELAY IN CHEKING IN AND IN SOMR ROOMS WIFI CONNECTION IS NOT GOOD SO THEY AHVE TO IMPROVE THAT. OTHERWISE THIS HOTEL IS BEST PLACE I HAVE EVER VISIT.

YOUR REGARDS

BEANT KAUR

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects, and suggesting improvements. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. The details provided are quite generic; for instance, 'provide details about the event' is met only by mentioning a 'party' and a 'networking session' without specific context. The under-length nature of the response means the ideas are not fully extended or supported as required for higher bands. To improve, you should expand on the nature of the event and provide more specific examples of the hotel's services.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and sometimes mechanical. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, such as the jump from the networking session to the staff. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall flow is somewhat disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', 'In addition to this') to connect your ideas more smoothly and create a more logical progression throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple adjectives like 'good', 'beautiful', and 'delicious'. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'thankful you to organise' instead of 'thank you for hosting' and 'vlear' (likely a typo for 'clean'). The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts the ability to convey more precise meanings. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated collocations and topic-specific vocabulary related to hospitality and event management, while ensuring that spelling is accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'This hotel provide' (subject-verb agreement), 'We do not face any kind of problem' (incorrect tense usage), and 'there was a little things' (plurality error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around periods. The range of structures is limited, and the errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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