Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing a letter regarding I helped to organize an event at hotel which held on 26 August 2026 the event was very beautiful because on that we did a seminar for people and 50 people participated in seminar. we provide buffet-lunch for full day. It was held in conference hall and we used two rooms for group discussion.

I would like to talk about your staff are very good and attentiveness. all equipments work very well such as audio system. catering staff provide food with diet restrictions. decorations was very well we did. all people are very happy who participated in seminar. They did lot of activities such as quizzes, games and etcetera.

I want to suggest for improvement areas such as not enough space in conference hall if we do big seminar for 100 people it cannot be happen here.

Your faithfuly,

Ajaydeep Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the details about the event are somewhat disjointed, and the suggestion for improvement lacks depth or a formal tone. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your ideas with more specific examples or explanations. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the structure of the sentences makes the communication feel a bit rushed and underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. You use very few cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition'), which makes the flow feel mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the event was very beautiful because on that we did a seminar'. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic message, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive language such as 'very good', 'very well', and 'very beautiful'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'all equipments work' (equipment is uncountable) and 'decorations was very well we did'. To improve, try to incorporate more specific adjectives and nouns related to event management, such as 'amenities', 'professionalism', or 'spaciousness', and pay closer attention to word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('decorations was'), article usage ('at hotel'), and tense consistency ('I am writing a letter regarding I helped'). You rely primarily on simple sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, these errors are noticeable and occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in a formal context.

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