Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I work for country lane builders. We organise Thanksgiving day event every yaer for our employees and their families. This year we choose your Conestoga hotel as our event destination.

Basically I am writting this letter to give overview for our event which we planned on 07 July 1999 at 7.00 PM. This event is heild as appreciation for the hardwork of our workers. We also distribute our yearly bounes among employees. Then it follow up by supper which will be served sharpe 8.30 PM. Event end at 9.00.

I loved your childern park which kids can play games and can enjoy the slides. I think kids will love it too when the will see on the day of event because this is very first time its happening at our event where we can have dedicated park for youngsters.

I would like to add on one thing for the betterment of the event. I feel we need to improve our guest enternce by adding some lights and playing soundful music at background. Otherswise everythings seems good to me.

I have attached my contact details for future questions.

Thanks

Your Thankful

Harman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. You provide details about the event, mentioning the date, purpose (appreciation and bonus distribution), and schedule. You also mention what you particularly liked about the hotel, specifically highlighting the children's park with its games and slides. Furthermore, you suggest areas for improvement by proposing the addition of lights and background music at the guest entrance. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed or expressed with minor confusion regarding timeframes, which places this response comfortably at a Band 6.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical structure divided into appropriate paragraphs, starting with an introduction and moving through details, positive feedback, suggestions, and a sign-off. However, referencing and cohesive devices are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For instance, transitions like 'Basically I am writting this letter' and 'Then it follow up by' feel unnatural and repetitive. Paragraphing is used adequately, but the flow between sentences could be smoother with more varied cohesive markers. Overall, the organization is clear enough to guide the reader without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'destination', 'appreciation', and 'betterment'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'yaer' instead of 'year', 'writting', 'heild', 'bounes', 'sharpe', 'childern', and 'Otherswise'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the lexical score from reaching higher bands. To improve, focus on checking basic spelling and using more precise collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The text shows a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'We organise Thanksgiving day event every year for our employees and their families' and 'I think kids will love it too when the will see on the day of event'. There are several grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('choose' instead of 'chose', 'is heild' instead of 'was held'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing like 'when the will see'. Despite these errors, the meaning remains mostly clear, which aligns with the Band 5.5 descriptors.

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