Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to show you some points I have been prepared for the event at the hotel. I am working on the core of the events and preparing some KYC points for all the workers and partners. I have prepared a shift summary for the workers and the to-do list so they can manage all the things with perfection. I have assigned some tasks to all the support team. Yesterday night I have visited all the rooms, kitchen, washrooms, gym and the swimming pool area, and honestly I have never seen a hotel like this before; the view was also very beautiful from the windows of every room. I am very excited for the event though, also I just want to tell you that the sofas seem some uncomfortable which are present on the stage so I just suggest you to please change them only otherwise everything is perfect.

Thank you so much for all this.

X.Y.Z

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three bullet points required in the prompt, but the execution is somewhat confusing and eccentric regarding the role assumed. You mention providing details about the event, such as preparing shift summaries and organizing a support team, and you describe the hotel rooms, kitchen, and pool area. You also include a suggestion about the stage sofas. However, instead of writing as the event organizer thanking the manager and reviewing the hotel's performance, the text reads more like internal staff preparation notes ('I am working on the core of the events and preparing some KYC points'). While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the perspective makes the communication slightly unnatural for a letter to a hotel manager, placing this performance in Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter opens and closes with standard letter-writing conventions ('Dear Sir / Madam,' and sign-off), but the body of the text is presented as a single, dense paragraph. Ideas flow from event preparation to a nighttime inspection of the hotel, and finally to a critique of the stage sofas without adequate paragraph breaks or clear transitional signposts. Cohesive devices like 'though' and 'also' are used, but referencing becomes repetitive ('the workers', 'the hotel', 'the rooms'). The lack of paragraphing for distinct topics (event details, hotel praise, and areas for improvement) limits the overall organizational clarity, resulting in a Band 5.5 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for basic communication, but it features several unnatural collocations and awkward phrasings. For instance, the phrase 'show you some points I have been prepared' is unidiomatic, and 'Yesterday night' should be 'Last night'. You attempt some less common terms like 'KYC points' and 'shift summary', but basic word choices are sometimes inaccurate, such as 'the sofas seem some uncomfortable'. There are no major spelling errors, but the limitations in lexical precision and natural phrasing restrict the score to a Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several tense and structural errors, such as 'I have been prepared' (incorrect passive/aspect), 'Yesterday night I have visited' (incorrect present perfect instead of past simple), and 'I just suggest you to please change them only otherwise everything is perfect' (run-on structure with redundant elements). While these errors do not completely block the transmission of your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impede smooth reading. A Band 5.0 reflects these persistent grammatical inaccuracies.

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