Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

DEAR SIR,

I AM WRITING A LETTER TO EXPRESS ABOUT FACILITIES IN YOUR HOTEL.

AUGUST 15TH, I VISIT YOUR HOTEL DURING A EVENT. IN THAT EVENT PROVIDE MANY KIND OF INFORMATON REGARDING THE BUISNESS OF HOTAL. EVENT HAD DECORATED BY WONDERFUL FLOWER WHICH WAS GIVING FASCINATING VIEW OF THE HOTEL. IT WAS LOOK LIKE A HEAVEN HOUSE. MOREOVER I NOTICE THAT THERE HAD BEEN ALL TYPE OF BUISNESMEN COME ON THAT PARTY. IT WAS GOOD OPPORTUNITIES TO MEET THEM. SO THAT I COULD TAKE A GOOD ADVICE THAT HOW TO GROW UPS MY BUSINESS.

IN THAT PARTY, THEIR I MOSTALY LIKED ONE PERSON CHARECTOR WHO HAVE VERY ATTRACTIVE LOOKS AND ALSO HE HAVE GOOD PERSONALITY. LET ME EXPLAIN THAT WHAT IS REASON FOR LIKE HIM, ONE FEMALE TRY TO CLIMB BY STAIRS ON THE STAGE UNFORTUNATALY HER FOOT IS SLIPPED BY THE STAIRS AND SHE FELT DOWN IMMEDIATELY THAT MAN HELP TO GETUP HER. STAIRS OF STAGE HAD BEEN BROKEN FROM A MONTH AGO. I REQUSET TO YOU THAT IF YOU COULD CHANGE THAT STAIRS, ALL VISITORS CAN EASILY CLIMB ON THAT STAGE.

THANK YOU

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. They provide details about the event, mentioning that it took place on August 15th and involved business information sharing and flower decorations. They mention what they liked about the hotel, highlighting the networking opportunities and the helpful intervention of a guest. Finally, they suggest an area for improvement by pointing out the broken stairs leading to the stage. However, the tone is somewhat inconsistent for a formal business letter, and some details are slightly rambling or tangential. Ideas are present and relevant, but development is limited in places, aligning this response with a Band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing, written almost as a single dense block or poorly separated sections. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused, such as starting sentences with 'SO THAT' or 'IN THAT PARTY, THEIR I MOSTALY LIKED'. Logical progression between ideas is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts in topic, moving from the business event to flower decorations, then to networking, and suddenly to an accident on the stairs. Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the narrative smoothly. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'BUISNESS OF HOTAL', 'LOOK LIKE A HEAVEN HOUSE', 'MOSTALY', 'CHARECTOR', and 'FELT DOWN'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'FASCINATING VIEW' and 'OPPORTUNITIES', but these are undermined by inaccurate collocations and persistent spelling mistakes. While communication is still generally achieved despite the errors, the lexical range and control remain limited, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent, severe errors. Examples include 'I AM WRITING A LETTER TO EXPRESS ABOUT', 'AUGUST 15TH, I VISIT YOUR HOTEL DURING A EVENT', 'EVENT HAD DECORATED BY', 'THAT MAN HELP TO GETUP HER', and 'STAIRS OF STAGE HAD BEEN BROKEN FROM A MONTH AGO'. Errors in tense usage, passive voice construction, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement are pervasive throughout the text and frequently cause difficulty and distraction for the reader, which corresponds to a Band 4.

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