Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

This is in reference to giving feedback about your service throughout an event organized by my company at your hotel.

My organization is grateful for your hospitality. The event was about job fair run by my organization, to give new graduate students an introduction of our company and guide them to better future job opportunities in our organization.

There are so many things that i liked about your hotel that how easy it is to find the location, also the way your main entrance looks more welcoming, the facilities you provide and also your banquet hall for the event. In addition, your staff is really helpful and humble.

However, there is thing or two that get my attention that need an improvment that i just want to share with you. Please provide drinking water bottele to every guest who visit for the event for next time and if its get crowded train your staff to guide them accordingly.

I would like to thank you for your hospitality and help. looking forword to do another event at your place.

Your Sincerly,

Drashti Khunt

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt successfully. You provide details about the event, stating clearly that it was a job fair run by your organization for new graduate students. You mention aspects you particularly liked about the hotel, such as the easy location, welcoming entrance, and helpful staff. Additionally, you suggest areas for improvement, specifically requesting bottled water and crowd management staff. The tone is consistently appropriate for a business correspondence letter to a hotel manager. Your ideas are relevant and fully addressed, earning a solid band score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a clear logical organization with an appropriate opening and closing. Paragraphing is used adequately to separate the introduction, details of the event, positive aspects, areas for improvement, and the closing remarks. Cohesive devices are generally handled well, using phrases like 'In addition' and 'However' to guide the reader. However, some referencing is slightly awkward, such as 'there is thing or two that get my attention', which minorly disrupts the flow. Overall, the arrangement is coherent and easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully conveying your message with appropriate terms such as 'hospitality', 'organization', 'banquet hall', and 'crowded'. There are some noticeable lexical and spelling errors, such as 'bottele' instead of bottle, 'improvment' instead of improvement, and 'looking forword' instead of looking forward. Furthermore, phrases like 'thing or two that get my attention' are slightly unnatural. Despite these errors, the range is sufficient to make your meaning clear, allowing you to achieve a solid band score in lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

Your writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('that how easy it is to find the location') and conditional clauses ('if its get crowded train your staff'). There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips, including missing apostrophes ('its'), agreement errors ('bottled water bottele'), and run-on sentences with comma splices. However, these errors do not impede communication, and the meaning of your letter remains entirely clear to the reader. Your control of grammar is consistent with a band 6.

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