Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

My name is Simi, and I am writing this to provide my feedback on the event that was hosted at your hotel.

Our company " LPG. Lmt" organized an anuall appreciation event at your hotel on September 12th, Saturday. There were 70 participants in this event, and it was including snacks and dinner. Overall, it went really smooth.

The most important thing I would love to mention is that the food and decoration was amazing. The games were also very organized and we all had fun.

However, there was an moment of disappointment with the customer service. I have notiuced that there were only 5 staff working for us, which has caused inconvenience. As per the requirement these should be more staff menbers to serve the people.

I hope you will accept my feedback and improve it in future.

Yiurs faithfully,

simi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student has attempted all parts of the prompt, including providing details about the event, mentioning what they liked about the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. For instance, the writer states that the event took place on September 12th with 70 participants, praises the food and decorations, and highlights the shortage of staff. However, the tone is slightly informal in places and, crucially, the word count is 145 words, which falls short of the mandatory 150-word minimum requirement. This negative constraint violation restricts the score to a maximum of Band 5.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a clear layout with an appropriate salutation and sign-off, although the sign-off contains a typo ("Yiurs faithfully"). The response is divided into logical paragraphs that separate the introduction, event details, positive aspects, and areas for improvement. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, such as "Overall," "However," and "The most important thing I would love to mention is that." Paragraphing is visible and appropriate for a short formal letter, ensuring that information flows reasonably well despite the brevity of the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for a general transaction letter, attempting terms like "appreciation event," "participants," and "disappointment." However, there are notable spelling and word-form errors, such as "anuall" instead of annual, "notiuced" instead of noticed, and "menbers" instead of members. Furthermore, the collocation "there should be more staff menbers" is somewhat unnatural. While communication is not impeded, these lexical errors and limitations prevent the score from reaching the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as "My name is Simi, and I am writing this to provide my feedback..." and "The most important thing I would love to mention is that the food and decoration was amazing." There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues like "the food and decoration was" (should be were) and tense/aspect confusion in "which has caused inconvenience" (past simple "caused" is more appropriate). Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear around the sign-off ("Yiurs faithfully,"). Despite these flaws, communication remains clear.

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