Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my satisfaction about services provided by your hotel, The Grand Walk.

I booked your hotel on 3 march,2026 for my company's event which was an important. It was about inaguration of new plant So this was the biggest event. My company invited many old employees, stakeholders and new employees. I would appreciate for your wonderful services which we enjoyed alot.

presentation of all cuisins is an icreadibly effective. Along with a variety of food, your employees served everything with good presenation as they were not messy. Similarly, the taste of food was so amazing. Everyone really enjoyed food.Most importantly, staff members who are the assets for your hotel, Since their way of greeting was friendly. They offered everything with a big smile.

Some aresa need to be improved.Firstly, inconvenice of parking facility is the main problem which I have noticed. Since many guests had parked their vehicles n the road which resulted in more traffic. I would recommend you that parking ought to be extended.Secondly,the number of employees is less. Though everyone performed good, due to shortage, we had to wait for long time.I would suggest new staff should be hired.

Hope you pay attention to improve your services.

Yours faithfully,

Ricky.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt, establishing a clear purpose right from the start. You provide adequate details about the event, such as the inauguration of a new plant on March 3, 2026, and mention what you particularly liked, specifically praising the presentation and taste of the food as well as the friendly greeting style of the staff. Furthermore, you effectively suggest areas for improvement by addressing the parking facility congestion and the staff shortage. While the ideas are clear and relevant throughout, some points, such as the description of the event, tend to be slightly over-generalized and could benefit from further extension to reach a fully developed professional standard. Overall, the communication of the message is direct, fulfilling the functional requirements of a business-oriented letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter presents a generally coherent overall arrangement with a clear, logical progression from the opening purpose through to the positive aspects, areas for improvement, and the closing remark. You make use of basic cohesive devices and markers such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to structure the suggestions effectively. Paragraphing is employed to separate distinct themes, moving appropriately from background and praises into recommendations. However, referencing and cohesion occasionally feel somewhat mechanical or abrupt, as seen in transitions like 'It was about inaguration of new plant So this was the biggest event' and the sudden introduction of paragraphs. To achieve a higher standard, the flow between sentences could be smoothed out with more varied and sophisticated cohesive links rather than relying heavily on repetitive structural patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary choice is adequate for the task, successfully conveying the intended meaning despite noticeable limitations. You attempt less common items and descriptive phrases, such as 'satisfaction about services', 'inauguration of new plant', and 'assets for your hotel', demonstrating an ambition to use varied phrasing. However, there are frequent spelling, word-choice, and word-formation errors that detract from precision, such as 'inaguration', 'cuisins', 'icreadibly effective', 'presenation', and 'inconvenice'. Furthermore, some collocations are awkward, such as 'vehicles n the road'. These lexical slips and inaccuracies do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the precision and fluency expected at higher levels, highlighting a need for more careful checking of word forms and spelling conventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to use relative clauses and subordinate structures like 'staff members who are the assets for your hotel' and 'due to shortage, we had to wait for long time.' However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text that cause difficulty and distraction for the reader. Issues include missing articles ('an important', 'for long time'), incorrect prepositions ('on 3 march', 'n the road'), and awkward phrasing or fragment structures like 'presentation of all cuisins is an icreadibly effective.' Additionally, punctuation is occasionally mishandled around clauses and transitional elements. Because these errors occur frequently and affect basic agreement and clause structures, the grammatical control remains constrained.

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