Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writting to inform you that, our campany want to organise event at your hotel. In addition, our organisation get a big tender which is beneficial for our campany. For the celebration of this, our employer decide to give a party to all emplyees. I saw a advertisement about your hotel which give a lot of facilitites. It has a big hall. You decorate it according to individual choice. Secondly, the food and service is very good of your restaurant. The workers are very polite and have good communication skills. One thing more which i like the most, you provide a comfortable environment like setting area.

Moreover, there is a need to do some improvements. there is a need of more workers like there is gathering of 500 people so you have limited staff for serving. Secondly, you should keep more trash bins so that people can throw waste material in it. It would be beneficial for you to keep your hotel neat and clean.

I am looking forward from you soon.

Your Sincerley,

Name Sony Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by mentioning details about the event, what was liked, and suggesting improvements, but some ideas are limited and under-developed. There is a noticeable temporal confusion in the opening where the writer states "our campany want to organise event" (present/future intent) when the prompt specifies they "recently helped" organise an event. The details about the event and hotel features, such as "It has a big hall. You decorate it according to individual choice," are stated simply without adequate elaboration. To reach a higher band, the response would need to more clearly reflect a past event, provide richer context, and fully develop all bullet points with more specific supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

There is a clear overall arrangement with paragraphs used to separate the different parts of the letter, such as the introduction of details and likes in the first body section, followed by areas for improvement in the second. Cohesive devices are used, such as "In addition," "Secondly," and "Moreover," though some referencing and transitions are a bit mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the transition "One thing more which i like the most" is somewhat clumsy. While the progression of ideas is generally understandable, improving the flexibility and natural flow of cohesive ties between sentences would help elevate the coherence of the letter.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that detract from the quality, such as "writting" instead of writing, "campany" instead of company, "emplyees" instead of employees, and "advertisement" instead of advertisement. Collocations and word choices are basic, such as "give a party" or "throw waste material in it." Although the meaning can generally be followed despite these slips, the frequent spelling and lexical inaccuracies prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple sentences alongside a few basic complex forms which are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, including tense and agreement issues such as "our campany want" instead of wanted, "our organisation get" instead of got, and "the food and service is very good" where a plural verb or restructuring is required. Punctuation and article usage also show persistent inaccuracies, such as missing capitalisation at the start of sentences ("there is a need"). These frequent errors cause some difficulty and distraction for the reader.

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