Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my appreciation for the services provided by your hotel at the 5th annual corporate gala of FAX solutions that took place last week. I want to share some feedback regarding our experience.

First of all, I would like to thank you for the excellent hospitality provide by your staff to all our guests. The attendees of the event were particularly impressed by the state-of-the-art sound system in the main conference hall and it made the overall experience worthwhile. Secondly, the catering services were exceptional and the banquet staff was extremely professional .

However, I would like to bring into discussion a couple of areas where improvements could be made. Firstly, the check-in process at the front desk was a bit slow that caused an unexpected delay in our guests arriving during peek hours. Secondly, a few guests reported a slow wi-fi in the main conference room that kept on disconnecting.

Thankyou for hosting us and I hope these suggestions will help in future corporate events.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the corporate gala, praises the hotel’s hospitality, sound system and catering, and raises concerns about check-in and Wi-Fi. The purpose and generally appreciative tone are clear. The event details, however, remain fairly broad: adding the number of attendees, the event’s schedule or how the hotel supported the gala would make this part more fully developed. The improvement points are relevant, but their impact is only briefly explained—for example, you could clarify how the check-in delay affected the start of the event or suggest a practical remedy. This covers the task effectively, while some ideas are less developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear progression: the opening explains why you are writing, the next section gives positive feedback, and the final section introduces areas for improvement before closing politely. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Secondly,” and “Firstly” help readers follow the points. Paragraphing also separates the praise from the concerns. Some linking is a little mechanical, however, because several points rely on ordinal transitions. The shift to “However” is clear, but the final thanks and hope for future events could connect more smoothly to the suggestions. Varying transitions and grouping related details into more deliberate paragraphs would make the progression feel more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal hotel letter, including “hospitality,” “state-of-the-art sound system,” “catering services,” and “professional.” These choices communicate both praise and criticism clearly, and the tone is generally appropriate. Some expressions are less natural or precise: “bring into discussion” is an awkward way to introduce concerns, while “slow wi-fi” could be expressed more specifically as an unreliable connection. There are also spelling and form issues in “peek hours” and “Thankyou.” These do not prevent understanding, but more accurate collocations and careful proofreading would improve control and make the language sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The letter includes both simple statements and longer structures, such as the sentence explaining that the sound system impressed attendees and made the experience worthwhile. Most of the message remains easy to understand, but some grammatical errors persist. In “the excellent hospitality provide by your staff,” the participle should be “provided.” The clause “a bit slow that caused an unexpected delay” needs a clearer grammatical link, such as “a bit slow, which caused…” Also, “a slow wi-fi” uses an unnecessary article in this context. These are noticeable but do not generally obstruct meaning. Check verb forms, relative clauses and article use, while continuing to use varied sentence structures.

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