Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I have recently help my company to organise an annual event in your prestigious hotel. Overall, the event went was oustanding and well maintained.

Event was scheduled at 8pm in the evening. It is an annual party of the company in which the company demonstrates gratitude and appreciation towards employees and even betows some rewards who performed well during the year.

The organisation of the event by your hotel was really impressive. The entire venue was adorned with colorful flowers and dazzling lights. The staff members were also polite and attentive. They were making sure o

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You begin to address the purpose of the letter by describing the company’s annual event and noting the hotel’s flowers, lighting, and attentive staff. However, the response is incomplete: it does not give much practical detail about the event, and the requested suggestions for improvement are entirely missing. The positive comments are relevant but brief, so the hotel manager receives little explanation of what worked especially well. The response also contains only 98 words, below the required 150, which leaves the task substantially underdeveloped. To improve, cover all three bullet points explicitly, add specific examples, and finish with clear, polite recommendations for the hotel.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas are grouped in a generally understandable order: you introduce the event, describe its purpose and timing, and then comment on the venue and staff. This gives the short letter a basic progression. However, the response ends abruptly at “They were making sure o”, so the final idea is unfinished and there is no closing or sign-off. The opening paragraph also moves quickly from the event’s success to its organisation without a clear transition. Use complete paragraphs for the event details, positive feedback, and improvement suggestions, and connect them with simple linking phrases such as “In addition” or “However”. A complete ending would make the letter feel more coherent and purposeful.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You show an adequate range for this letter and attempt some more formal or descriptive expressions, including “prestigious hotel”, “gratitude and appreciation”, “adorned with colorful flowers”, and “dazzling lights”. These choices help convey a positive impression. However, several word forms or collocations are inaccurate, such as “betows some rewards”, while “well maintained” does not clearly describe how the event went. “Outstanding” is also misspelled as “oustanding”. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but more precise and natural phrasing would strengthen the letter. Choose vocabulary that fits the context, such as “presented awards” and “ran smoothly”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and a longer relative-clause structure, as in “an annual party … in which the company demonstrates gratitude and appreciation towards employees”. The main ideas are generally understandable, and the response shows some ability to combine information. However, there are several grammatical errors: “I have recently help” needs a past participle, “the event went was” contains an unnecessary verb, and “Event was scheduled” needs an article. The sentence beginning “They were making sure” is also incomplete. These issues show that verb forms, articles, and sentence completion need more consistent control. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and ensure that every sentence is complete.

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