Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir, Mam,

I am writing to expess my gratitude towards your services provided last week at our company event from the behalf of my whole team .

Firstly , the decore was beowned my expections , it was completely aligned with the team of your cooperate party , everybody praised a lot about that . Secondly , the food menu was too good and satisfying , the quality and taste was much appreitated and worth the cost and lastly I would like to thanks again for arranging every thing in such a short notice .

I would also like to get your attention on one difficulty that some of our guest faced , the parking space is not enough and their is no security guard avalible there to manage the traffice and a lot parking parkings. I request to work on the demerit to make your services more enjoyable.

Looking forward to organise more company events at you place .

Your Faithfully ,

Navneet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter covers all three required points: it identifies a company event held last week, praises the décor and food, and raises concerns about parking and traffic management. The purpose is clear and the tone is generally appreciative, which suits a letter to a hotel manager. However, some details are less fully developed than others. For example, the event itself is described only briefly, and the parking problem would be clearer with a specific explanation of its effect on guests. The improvement request, “work on the demerit,” is also vague; state directly that you recommend expanding the parking area or providing a security guard. A more accurate salutation and closing would also make the letter more appropriate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The message has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens with its purpose, moves to positive comments, then introduces a problem and closes with a wish to return. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “lastly” help signal the sequence, and the reader can follow the main points. The paragraphs also broadly separate praise from the complaint. However, the list of compliments is packed into one long paragraph, and the repeated sequencing words make the progression somewhat mechanical. The parking sentence combines several concerns without clear separation, while “their” does not clearly refer to the guests. Use shorter, focused paragraphs and link the parking issue to a specific recommendation so the relationship between ideas is more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for a formal service letter, including “gratitude,” “quality and taste,” “parking space,” and “security guard.” These choices communicate the main message, but the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less natural. Examples include “expess,” “decore,” “beowned my expections,” and “a lot parking parkings.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “the team of your cooperate party” does not clearly describe the event, and “work on the demerit” is not a natural way to request an improvement. Choose accurate, conventional expressions and check spelling carefully; this will make your praise and complaint clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message remains understandable. However, control is uneven, particularly in longer sentences. In “the quality and taste was much appreciated,” the compound subject requires a plural verb; “there is no security guard” also needs a clearer tense to match the past event. Other examples include “from the behalf of,” “thanks again,” and “Looking forward to organise,” where the grammatical patterns are not well controlled. Punctuation and spacing around commas are inconsistent, and the closing phrase is not formed correctly. Build accuracy by using shorter sentences for each point, checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and proofreading punctuation.

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