Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Jack,

My name is Makion CLark. Last month on 22 August I held event on your hotel. My friend is your regular customer so he suggest your hotle name.

I decided to celebrate my mother's 48 birthday. However, I told you we want some special round tabels for played games, different lights and projector. Indeed you provied us everything without any charges. All my guests were so happy after watched decoration you did and hospitality was top notch.

Secondly, for my point of view I would like that your staff well trained and with good dress up on them, also hotel is very clean and tidy. Moreover, l would dislike about the washroom was not clean and floor was wet, so as a result any kids or elders may go there, then they might be injured. Additionally, I would give you some suggestion that if your staff check washroom and floor frequently, it can prevent any cause.

Thank you to all staff members and entired team for make these event smooth.

Your faithfully,

Makion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main requested points: you explain that the event was your mother’s birthday, mention the hotel’s provision of tables, lighting and a projector, praise the decoration and hospitality, and identify the washroom as an area needing attention. However, some details are unclear or not fully developed. For example, “I held event on your hotel” does not clearly explain the event’s scale or arrangements, and the praise is mixed with comments about staff dress and training, whose meaning is difficult to follow. The improvement request—checking the washroom and floor more frequently—is relevant, but could be stated more directly and politely. The greeting “Dear Jack” also conflicts with the task’s requested formal opening and the formal sign-off.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the event, describes what the hotel provided, then gives feedback and closes with thanks. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages. However, progression is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are joined mechanically or placed together without a clear relationship. “Secondly” does not introduce a clear second point, while “Moreover” precedes a negative comment about the washroom, making the contrast confusing. The sentence beginning “for my point of view” combines staff training, clothing and cleanliness in a way that obscures the intended praise. Use clearer paragraph focus and transitions such as “I particularly appreciated…” and “One area that could be improved is…” to make the message easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “projector,” “decoration,” “hospitality,” and “frequently,” and the reader can generally identify your main points. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the letter difficult to understand. Examples include “held event on your hotel,” “special round tabels,” “good dress up,” and “entired team.” Some expressions, such as “top notch,” are conversational and less suitable for a formal letter to a manager. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “held an event at your hotel,” “round tables,” and “well-presented staff.” Check spelling carefully and choose a consistently polite, formal register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional idea: “if your staff check washroom and floor frequently, it can prevent any cause.” However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include missing articles in “I held event,” “my mother's 48 birthday,” and “the washroom,” as well as incorrect verb forms in “he suggest” and “after watched.” Sentence structure also needs attention in “I would like that your staff well trained,” which lacks a clear grammatical construction. Practise forming complete clauses, using past-tense verbs consistently when describing the event, and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and prepositions. These corrections will make your meaning clearer.

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