Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to provide my feedback of my recent visit at Hotel Moonlight. Actually , we booked your resort to celebrate my father's 50th birthday party because it was a greatest occation for us that we wanted to celebrate. we have reserved your whole second floor including lounge area from 6:00 pm to 10:00 pm.

The ambience of the hotel was outstanding and I am absolutely obsessed with the decoration of the whole area. Also, I really have no words for the food and catering management which was as delicious as expected .

On the other hand, there are still some areas where your services were lacking for example your servers were not much friendly which effects the hospitality and make feel guests avoided . Moreover , drinks station should be seperate from food so that everything does not feel congested and lighting needs to improved because for night events it was not suitable as there were dark in some areas .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that the hotel hosted your father’s 50th birthday, identify the décor and catering as highlights, and suggest improvements to staff service, the drinks station and lighting. The event details, including the second-floor booking and time, make the letter relevant and specific. The positive feedback is particularly clear, while the improvement points are less fully explained: for example, you say the servers were unfriendly but do not give an example or describe how this affected the event. The letter also ends without a closing or a clear request for the manager to consider your feedback. Adding a brief concluding sentence and developing one or two suggestions would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The ideas follow a sensible overall order: the purpose and event details come first, followed by what you liked and then areas for improvement. Paragraphing helps distinguish these parts, and linking phrases such as “Also” and “On the other hand” make the shift in focus clear. However, the final paragraph combines several separate complaints in one long sentence, so the suggestions are harder to follow. The transition “On the other hand” is understandable, but a more direct phrase such as “However, I would like to suggest a few improvements” would suit a formal feedback letter. Separate the service, drinks-station and lighting points into clearer units, and add a conventional closing to give the letter a more complete progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “ambience,” “catering management,” “congested” and “hospitality,” and the reader can understand your main points. There are also attempts at expressive language, such as “I have no words for the food,” though this is less natural in a formal letter than a direct description of the meal. Some word choices and spelling errors reduce precision: “feedback of my recent visit” and “a greatest occation” are not idiomatic, while “seperate” is misspelled. “Obsessed with” is also too informal and intense for this context. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and a consistently polite register, especially when describing the hotel’s strengths and shortcomings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “we have reserved” does not fit the past event as well as “we reserved,” and “which effects the hospitality and make feel guests avoided” has problems with verb form, agreement and sentence construction. In “lighting needs to improved,” the passive form is incomplete; write “the lighting needs to be improved.” There are also punctuation and spacing issues, such as the space before the comma in “Actually ,” and missing sentence breaks in the final paragraph. Review past-tense consistency and build shorter, complete sentences around each suggestion.

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