Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to share details about the event that was held last week in the Taj hotel.

My name is Jaspreet Kaur and I am working as an event manager in your company. Actually, I want to recap some highlights from the recent excibition of artifacts and award distribution function that was organised on 25th July. The event was successful and we were able to generate funds for the business by displaying antique products.

Here, I want to mention that the venue provided by the resort was really impressive in terms of its services, such as parking, seating arrangements and food. Everyone at the excibition were impressed and posted great reviews online.

There are some improvements that need to be reviewed in upcoming functions. Firstly, we should hire a professional DJ because the sound system at the event had several glitches. It would be really appreciated if some performaces can be arranged by our team members as it can catch more eyes in terms of the team work efforts.

Kindly take it into your kind consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Jaspreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the event as an exhibition and award-distribution function, describes positive features of the hotel, and proposes improvements. Details such as the date, the display of antique products, parking, seating and food make the account relevant. The positive comments are reasonably clear, but the improvement suggestions are less fully explained: the sound-system problem is mentioned, while the proposed team performances are not clearly linked to a specific benefit beyond attracting attention. The opening also says the event was held at the Taj hotel, but later calls the venue a resort, which leaves some uncertainty. More precise, consistently developed details would make the response more complete and purposeful.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: it introduces the event, describes what worked well, and then turns to improvements before closing. Paragraphing supports this progression, and signposts such as “Firstly” help the reader follow the suggestions. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “Here, I want to mention” is an awkward transition, and “It would be really appreciated if some performances can be arranged” does not clearly show who would arrange them or how this relates to the hotel’s responsibilities. The closing sentence is also rather abrupt. Use more natural transitions and make references and responsibilities explicit to achieve smoother cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range for a formal letter, including relevant terms such as “event manager,” “seating arrangements,” “sound system” and “generate funds.” It also attempts more specific vocabulary, but several choices or spellings reduce precision: “excibition” and “performaces” are misspelled, while “catch more eyes” is an unnatural expression in this context. “Take it into your kind consideration” is also an awkward formal phrase. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the message, but more accurate spelling and natural collocations would strengthen control. Prefer concise, conventional wording when making requests or describing the event.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most ideas remain understandable. For example, the sentence beginning “It would be really appreciated if…” attempts a conditional structure, while “as it can catch more eyes” adds a reason. Some grammatical errors remain: “Everyone at the exhibition were impressed” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “if some performances can be arranged” would fit the polite request better as “if some performances could be arranged.” The phrase “I am working as an event manager in your company” is also less natural in its tense and preposition. Review agreement and conditional forms, while keeping the generally clear sentence structure.

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