Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or madam,

I am writing to provide you a feedback related to your hotel services which i recieved during our companys' confrerence meeting in last weak.I would also want to suggest you to make some changes in services.

Firstly, I would like to provide you detail of our event.Actually , Last week i arranged an important conference meeting in your hotel conference hall on second floor.It was for fifteen people in that event and we arranged a lunch and a buffet items for all of us .

I would like to appreciate your hotel staff they all were welcoming and supportive .I really liked all the arrangement over there. The decoration was incredible and an eye catching.My boss was really impressed with services . I felt happy that I choose your regency for my office meeting.

I was only disapointent with one of your services that the food was not served freshed or might be warmed up .I believe you understand this because food was an important to shows hotel services in front of their customers.I would like to suggest you to investigate this issue wheather it was only that day happened or it is always happening to others cutsomers.

I believe you should reconsider my suggestion.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Your faithfully,

Param

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that the event was a 15-person company conference with lunch, praise the welcoming staff and decoration, and identify a problem with the food being served cold or insufficiently warmed. The purpose is clear and the complaint is relevant. The event details and positive comments are understandable, but some points are only briefly developed; for example, you do not explain what specific arrangements worked especially well, and the food concern would be stronger with a clear description of what happened and its effect. The request to investigate is appropriate, though a more direct, courteous request for action would make the letter more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: an opening purpose, a paragraph about the event, praise, a complaint with a suggestion, and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Firstly” and the transition to “I was only disappointed” help the reader follow the main points. However, some links feel mechanical, and punctuation around sentence boundaries is inconsistent, as in “event.Actually” and “floor.It.” The praise paragraph also moves quickly between staff, decoration, your boss’s reaction, and your own satisfaction. Grouping related details more smoothly and using clearer transitions between the event description, appreciation, and complaint would create more natural progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for a hotel complaint, including “conference hall,” “buffet,” “welcoming,” “supportive,” and “investigate,” so the message remains understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “incredible” and “eye-catching.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “recieved,” “confrerence,” “disapointent,” and “cutsomers” are difficult to overlook, while phrases such as “provide you a feedback” and “food was not served freshed” are not natural collocations. Some wording is also vague, particularly “all the arrangement.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more conventional expressions for feedback and food service would make the vocabulary more accurate and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, including “I believe you understand this because…” and “I would like to suggest you to investigate…”. The main message is generally clear, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include missing or incorrect articles and prepositions in “provide you a feedback” and “in last weak,” tense and verb-form problems in “I choose your regency,” and the construction “food was an important to shows.” Capitalisation and sentence punctuation also need attention, with lower-case “i” and several sentences joined directly after full stops. Review article use, verb forms, and sentence boundaries, then check each sentence for a complete and natural grammatical structure.

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