Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir or Madam,

i have write a letter to the hotel manager .i recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. i have arranaged a annul promgrame for teachers and students the total number of people was about 70 plus .We ate there dinner and spend a lot of time there. we took some pictures.i liked the place that was near to our house . The booking price was suitable and average .This hotel has big ground for programme arranagements.Sir i want to give some suggestions according to hotel .The parking area was to small our guest face the problems in car parking, the food was not perheated, no have 6 inches mirror for taking the pictures and did not have any enternce system.we had time for close the programme and your staff swicht off the all light i felt abraurs infron the guests and shymful.kindly give the time give at less according to time and improve the things please.

Your sincerly,

Aniqa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that the event was a programme for teachers and students with about 70 attendees, mention the convenient location, reasonable booking price and large grounds, and identify problems with parking, food, facilities and staff. These details make the letter relevant and show a clear purpose. However, several points are difficult to understand or insufficiently explained, such as “no have 6 inches mirror” and the lack of an “entrence system.” The complaint about the lights being switched off is more specific, but the requested remedy is unclear. Develop each suggestion in clear terms and state what action you would like the manager to take. The response meets the task’s length requirement; the 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The information broadly follows a useful order: event details, positive features, then complaints and a request. This gives the reader a basic sense of the letter’s purpose. However, nearly everything is placed in one long paragraph, so the different functions of the letter are not clearly separated. The transition from “I liked the place” to “Sir i want to give some suggestions” is abrupt, and the list of problems runs together without clear links or punctuation. Use separate paragraphs for the event and positive comments, the improvements, and the closing request. Linking phrases such as “However,” “In addition,” and “Finally” would make the progression easier to follow, while clearer sentence boundaries would prevent ideas from blending.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “booking price,” “parking area,” “guests,” and “suggestions,” so the reader can identify the main topics. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or imprecise expressions make parts of the message difficult to interpret: “arranaged,” “annul promgrame,” “perheated,” and “swicht off the all light.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “big ground for programme arranagements” and “face the problems in car parking.” Choose accurate, conventional expressions for hotel facilities and event arrangements, and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you explain the problems without changing the relevant ideas you have included.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The letter attempts to communicate several kinds of information, including past event details and requests, but it relies mainly on short, joined clauses and does not show a controlled range of sentence structures. Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “i have write a letter” needs a correct verb form, while “We ate there dinner and spend a lot of time there” shifts tense and uses an incorrect construction. “The parking area was to small our guest face the problems” also joins two clauses without suitable punctuation or a connector. Practise forming complete sentences, keeping past-tense verbs consistent, and using articles and plural forms accurately. Capitalise “I” and punctuate sentence boundaries.

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