Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to provide you some information about the last event which was held on last sunday . it was a birthday party of a teenager. there was nearly 250 guest in the hall . it was a day time event .So, people of every age group have come .

I was working as a team leader on that day. i really enjoyed and decoration is up to mark.

The menu of the catering is liked by everyone although the taste of chinese food not fullfill the expectations. Guest join the dance floor when dj boy played the music. Everyone ready to break the dance floor.

Overall it was a fantastic event but I have some concerns . I want to let you know , We should use the fresh flowers rather than the artficial. which will increase the quality of decorations. sometimes, rude serving staff behaviour to the customers. waiters should be soft spoekn and patiently.

I look forward to see you soon.

Jaspreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you describe the birthday party, mention the decoration and catering, and suggest fresh flowers and more courteous service. The event details—around 250 guests, a daytime celebration, and your role as team leader—make the letter relevant. Your positive comments about the hotel are present, especially “decoration is up to mark,” but they are brief and do not clearly identify other aspects of the hotel you valued. The improvement suggestions are also useful, though the concern about staff behaviour would be clearer with a specific example or a more tactful explanation. Develop these less fully covered points and make the purpose and feedback more explicit to strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the event, describes the celebration, gives an overall evaluation, and then raises concerns. The closing also suits a formal letter. However, the paragraphing and links between ideas are not always effective. For example, the shift from the catering menu to the dance floor is abrupt, and “Overall it was a fantastic event but I have some concerns” introduces the suggestions without clearly separating praise from recommendations. Some sentences are joined or punctuated inconsistently, which makes the flow less smooth. Group related details into clear paragraphs and use straightforward transitions to show how each point connects to the event and to your feedback.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main event details and feedback, including “team leader,” “catering,” “decoration,” and “artificial flowers.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the menu of the catering,” “break the dance floor,” and “soft spoken and patiently.” Spelling errors in “artficial,” “fullfill,” and “spoekn” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they make parts of the letter less clear and polished. Aim for more natural phrases and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe the food as meeting expectations and the staff as polite and patient.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both short statements and some attempts to combine ideas, such as “The menu … is liked by everyone although…” and “which will increase the quality of decorations.” However, there are some errors in sentence structure, tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation. Examples include “there was nearly 250 guest,” “people … have come,” and “I look forward to see you soon.” The opening also has an unclear construction in “provide you some information,” while several sentence starts and clauses are not punctuated consistently. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the overall meaning remains understandable. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentence structures, and proofread for agreement and verb patterns.

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