Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to express my appreciation and offer some feedback regarding my office event that was held in your hotel's Bell Galla Lounge.

It was on the 3rd Floor of the hotel. Firstly, the decoration was eye-catching; everyone praised it. I also appreciate the way your staff welcomed our Company's team. It was an event with 80 people gathering to celebrate the achievement of Best Company in the Area. The complimentary starters tasted fabulous. The Ambience of the hotel and friendly staff win everyone's heart over there.

Though the whole party was amazing, there is one thing that I did not like: there were no directions or guide arrangements for the guests to reach at the Venue inside the Hotel. People find it very difficult to reach the exact location. I believe that your company should put up some banners or Direction boards so that it will be easy for future visitors to find their destination.

At last, I really wanted to thank you for all the arrangements that has been done for our company.

Thankyou

Ravneet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies the event as a company celebration for 80 people, praises the hotel’s decoration, staff and complimentary starters, and recommends adding signs to help guests find the venue. The purpose is clear and the tone is appropriately appreciative while still making a specific request. The event details and positive features are relevant, but some points are listed rather than developed—for example, the celebration’s achievement is named without explaining why the event was significant, and the praise for the atmosphere is quite general. To strengthen the response further, add a little more specific detail about the event and explain the effect of the navigation problem on guests.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a sensible sequence: the opening states the purpose, the next paragraph describes the event and what worked well, and the following paragraph introduces the improvement request. This makes the letter easy to follow overall. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated sequencing phrases “Firstly” and “At last,” and the final thanks feels abrupt rather than a natural conclusion. There is also a slight shift between “I” and “our company” that could be managed more consistently. Use transitions that show the relationship between ideas, and close with a conventional sign-off such as “Yours faithfully” to give the letter a more complete structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes some suitable descriptive choices, such as “eye-catching,” “complimentary starters,” and “friendly staff.” The writer also communicates the requested improvement clearly through “banners or Direction boards.” Some word choices and collocations are less natural or imprecise, however: “reach at the Venue” and “win everyone’s heart over there” do not sound idiomatic in this context, while “guide arrangements” is unclear. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “Company,” “Ambience,” “Venue,” and “Direction.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “find the venue” and “the staff made a positive impression,” and use capitals only for proper names or sentence beginnings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including the contrast introduced by “Though the whole party was amazing” and the recommendation clause beginning “so that.” Meaning remains clear despite some grammatical errors. For example, “People find it very difficult” shifts into the present tense while describing a past event; “arrangements that has been done” has an agreement and verb-form problem; and “reach at the Venue” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. The sentence “The Ambience of the hotel and friendly staff win everyone’s heart” also has a subject–verb agreement issue. Review tense consistency in past-event descriptions, agreement with plural subjects, and verb patterns after “reach.”

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