Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Neethu Simon, writing to let you know my feedback on the baking event we hosted at ABC hotel on 12th February, 2026. It was a huge success, I recieved a lot of positive notes both from the participants and the hotel management.

The stage looked exactly like a real bake house, and the planning part were exceptional. The idea to sell those cake from the event was amazing. We made a good profit from that part alone.

I loved the idea to promote small home based bakers through this event. Shortly after the event many participants messaged me saying they are getting more orders than usual. Guess the event helped them to market their products. Also, I like how we marketed the event through social media with the real participants and their stories. The concept was very unique and catchy.

I also would like to put forward some suggestions, even though everything was arranged well I felt like the crowd was poorly managed. The crowd was more people than we anticipated and few hours after the event started they got frustrated because of the long wait time. I think it would be good if we arrange something like a ticket counter next time.

Thanks for your time and consideration

Thanks,

Name

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requested points and maintains a clear, positive purpose. You identify the event as a baking event at ABC Hotel, give its date, and explain its success through positive feedback and sales. Your praise is specific, especially the realistic bake-house stage and the promotion of home-based bakers. You also identify a clear area for improvement: crowd management, with a practical suggestion to introduce a ticket counter. These details support the main points rather than leaving the letter off-topic. To make the response more fully developed, explain how the long waits affected the event or clarify how a ticketing system would reduce congestion. A more formal closing would also suit a letter to a hotel manager better.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a sensible sequence: you introduce the event, describe its success and what you valued, then move to suggestions. Paragraphing helps distinguish these purposes, and links such as “Also” and “I also would like to” make the progression easy to follow. This gives the letter a coherent overall structure. However, some connections are abrupt or repetitive, and the long paragraph about the event’s benefits combines several related but distinct points. “Guess the event helped them to market their products” also has an unclear reference to the preceding sentence. Use clearer transitions and divide the praise into more focused ideas; for example, connect the participants’ increased orders directly to the event’s promotional value. The repeated “Thanks” at the end could be replaced with one conventional sign-off.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing the event and its outcomes, including “huge success,” “positive notes,” “promote,” “frustrated,” and “long wait time.” Phrases such as “home based bakers” and “market their products” communicate the event’s purpose clearly. There are, however, some spelling and word-choice or collocation errors that limit precision: “recieved” is misspelled, “positive notes” is less natural than “positive feedback,” and “the crowd was more people than we anticipated” is awkward. “Catchy” is understandable but somewhat informal in this business letter. Aim for more precise, natural expressions such as “attendance exceeded expectations” and “the event’s concept was distinctive and appealing.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and the meaning remains clear throughout. You use clauses to explain outcomes, as in “many participants messaged me saying they are getting more orders than usual,” and a conditional suggestion in “it would be good if we arrange something like a ticket counter next time.” Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the planning part were exceptional” has subject–verb disagreement, while “those cake” needs a plural noun. In “even though everything was arranged well I felt,” punctuation is needed after the introductory clause. The sentence about the crowd is also structurally awkward. Review agreement, plural forms, and punctuation, and use a consistent past-time frame when describing what happened at the event.

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